This is my 3rd attempt at an article, as Man-Eating Sheep got deleted and UnNews:NATO Declares War on Kangaroos never got to the front page. The article probably needs A LOT of help. -Velosi-T 16:02, 15 July 2008 (UTC) Velosi-T 16:02, 15 July 2008 (UTC)
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| - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Walk like a normal person
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| - This is my 3rd attempt at an article, as Man-Eating Sheep got deleted and UnNews:NATO Declares War on Kangaroos never got to the front page. The article probably needs A LOT of help. -Velosi-T 16:02, 15 July 2008 (UTC) Velosi-T 16:02, 15 July 2008 (UTC)
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| - average of other sections.
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| - some of the sections seem a tad short, maybe try to add a couple sentences here and there. you can use __NOTOC__ to get rid of that unsightly table of contents if you wish. no spelling or grammar mistakes on my read-through.
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| - the weak point of your article. you need at least 2 more images to round out this one. probably nothing fancy, just more images of people walking with witty captions. . the one you have is good, just throw a few more ina similar vein towrds the beginning/middle. the tip template works well, but it needs to be reformatted a little
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| - points for exceeding my expectations based on the title alone. a lot of HowTo's are really lame, but you succeed quite nicely here.
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| - average of all sections.
*intro: 8.5
a solid start, good all-around. the link to your userpage has to go, though.
*step 1: 6.5
this section kind of drags. maybe take out the "TOO BAD" parts, they really don't contribute much.
*step 2: 8.5
you find your voice again here. the that thing line i saw comign a mile away, but it still made me laugh.
*step 3: 8
pretty consistent again. your condescending tone really makes this article sparkle.
*advanced walking techniques: 8
nicely wrapped up. i suggest one or two more additions here, possibly things like 'running', 'walking backwards', 'walking your dog', 'walking your dog ', 'walking on broken glass'. i could go on and on.
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| - you've got a good article here. don't let the score get you down, with another 4 or 5 image points you can push this up towards VFH. i suggest doing just that, along with adding some lines. i recommend coming back to this article after you havent touched it for a while, often when i do that i see jokes that didn't occur to me because i'd read the material so many times. in any case, i offer you my assistance should you ever need it, and i wish you good luck.
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| - This is my 3rd attempt at an article, as Man-Eating Sheep got deleted and UnNews:NATO Declares War on Kangaroos never got to the front page. The article probably needs A LOT of help. -Velosi-T 16:02, 15 July 2008 (UTC) Velosi-T 16:02, 15 July 2008 (UTC)
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