Thank you very much for your review. It has helped and I'll get right on the suggestions. A chainsaw salute to you, sir. Jimmy the Hellhound 12:55, 14 January 2008 (UTC) I WAS WONDERING IF SOMEONE COULD RE-PEE REVIEW THIS. I have edited the article and I would like to see what people think. If you're looking for another review, you should just make a new pee review page--people probably won't see it here. - 20:27, Feb 7
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| - Thank you very much for your review. It has helped and I'll get right on the suggestions. A chainsaw salute to you, sir. Jimmy the Hellhound 12:55, 14 January 2008 (UTC) I WAS WONDERING IF SOMEONE COULD RE-PEE REVIEW THIS. I have edited the article and I would like to see what people think. If you're looking for another review, you should just make a new pee review page--people probably won't see it here. - 20:27, Feb 7
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| - The grammar is fine. There's some pretty funny stuff in there but it feels to... randomly structured. I can tell ywv attempted somewhat at a more informative-style article i.e. it's all based on the information , but what yew really need is a story about him, not information.
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| - Suits the article perfectly, and they're all funny in their own right not because of the image themselves but the captions under them.
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| - Nice idea, just not-so-well implemented into a story. In fact it doesn't really form a coherent story at all, it's just really a bunch of random diary entries. I think what yew need is to parody something: like Banksy, that could be a good idea. Just having a weird account on what this hippie is doing isn't really funny.
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| - Very very very very eccentric. I like this sort of stuff personally, but I know for a fact that alot of other people will not. What yew really need to do is firstly, fix the intro. You need to add alot more info, like why is it a diary? Whose perspective is it from? I got kinda lost almost straight away 'cos it jumped straight from "Everyone knows about him" to a diary. The the diary needs to be put into proper prose to form a story along with the information below it. Or yew could just get rid of the diary altogether... either way's good.
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| - The best thing yew could do to this article is to form a story using all the info ywv got, and use all the facts about him to form the intro to it. This article's got a lot of potential!
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| - Thank you very much for your review. It has helped and I'll get right on the suggestions. A chainsaw salute to you, sir. Jimmy the Hellhound 12:55, 14 January 2008 (UTC) I WAS WONDERING IF SOMEONE COULD RE-PEE REVIEW THIS. I have edited the article and I would like to see what people think. If you're looking for another review, you should just make a new pee review page--people probably won't see it here. - 20:27, Feb 7
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