Globaltourniquet - (was TPLN) 21:36, 15 June 2009 (UTC) I'll try and get this after I get out of work tomorrow, provided something doesn't come up. 03:41, 16 June 2009 (UTC) K, I got this. 23:53, 16 June 2009 (UTC) Can I make a fly-by suggestion? Lose a few of the lesser-known films. Currently this reads too much like a chronological saga where each subject is covered equally just for the purpose of being encyclopaedic. It's okay to write a piece about someone using a selected filmography/discography, you know? IronLung 22:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
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| - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Terry Gilliam
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| - Globaltourniquet - (was TPLN) 21:36, 15 June 2009 (UTC) I'll try and get this after I get out of work tomorrow, provided something doesn't come up. 03:41, 16 June 2009 (UTC) K, I got this. 23:53, 16 June 2009 (UTC) Can I make a fly-by suggestion? Lose a few of the lesser-known films. Currently this reads too much like a chronological saga where each subject is covered equally just for the purpose of being encyclopaedic. It's okay to write a piece about someone using a selected filmography/discography, you know? IronLung 22:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
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| - Feels like you deserve better than what the average would've been.
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| - Everything's solid, though there are a few minor things. In the second paragraph, it should be "Gilliam" instead of "he," the last sentence of the Time Bandits section should say "who," instead of "[comma] so they," minor things like that. Just give it a quick once-over proofread and this becomes an 8 or 9, easy.
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| - To quote Gilliam/your article, "pedestrian." The bit about Bruce Willis's hair is great, and the other images are good. I would suggest adding another one in either the Tideland Or Imaginarium... section, to balance out the sizeable amount of text there.
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| - On the one hand, it's simple and eloquent. On the other hand, perhaps a bit too much so. See my above comment.
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| - This is alright, though, like your other recent film article, it is essentially a one-joke show, said joke being: "Gilliam takes films way over budget, sit back and let me explain how." There is nothing wrong with this--it's actually quite funny--but I think you need a bit more. I was thinking maybe you could do something along the lines of "the critical success of Terry Gilliam's films--barring other variables--is directly related to how far they go over budget," and then maybe make a chart demonstrating this. That, or perhaps lampoon the ridiculous premises of his movies a bit more, like you do at the end of the Time Bandits section. After all, with a movie about a time-traveler from the near future trying to stop the Army of the Twelve Monkeys from destroying the world with a super-virus, how could you go wrong?
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| - Fix it up just a tad, and broaden the comedic angle, and again, like with Jim Jarmusch, you'll have a feature-worthy article that hopefully comes in under budget.
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| - Globaltourniquet - (was TPLN) 21:36, 15 June 2009 (UTC) I'll try and get this after I get out of work tomorrow, provided something doesn't come up. 03:41, 16 June 2009 (UTC) K, I got this. 23:53, 16 June 2009 (UTC) Can I make a fly-by suggestion? Lose a few of the lesser-known films. Currently this reads too much like a chronological saga where each subject is covered equally just for the purpose of being encyclopaedic. It's okay to write a piece about someone using a selected filmography/discography, you know? IronLung 22:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
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